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[kv]

So this is backstory, from before little Red saves Barge?

Or does the guy just get kidnapped a lot?

  -kv

[Nike Shox]

It was good it had me entertained...lol.

[Zone]

Backstory Kid.  You generally only get one chance to kidnap Barge...

[kv]

Yeah, it was just a funny thought that occured to me, that maybe Barge is just a walking kidnap victim or something. It would be kind of ironic, to have one set of friends spring you, only to be kidnapped by someone else.

  -kv

[Zone]

Go . New Except in the OP slot  

[BornKrazi]

That was great...I take it she was a weasel shaman?

[Curris]

I like the way the vision scene is done. With my own writing, I tend to over-detail, which slows the reading down to boring. But your style flows right on through. I won't say that you skip details, because your story seems richer without them. It keeps magic (and magic herbs) mysterious and lets the imagination go.

In addition, it seems real. Red just accepts what Standing in Wind Woman can do. It's a trait of hers, no big deal. But it's refreshing to see that magic is still news to some people.

Well done, I say. Worthy of a professionally published novel.

[kv]

Yeah, it's incredibly well written. I know of several books off the top of my head that aren't that well written. Have you submitted anything to be published? I mean, WizKids still publishes the stories as text in thier books. I'm betting they could use something awesome like that without too much trouble or fuss.

  -kv

[Zone]

Thanks for the ego boost guys.  I once looked into getting this story published, but they have a very mapped out do and don't and where they want things to go in their world.  Basically it seems like a closed set.  So probably I'll just web publish this when its done and let a few folks in to read it.  I'll let you know when tickets become availble  

BTW the weasle is Ray's animal guide, not Stands in the Wind's - she's one of the bird shamans but I haven't decided which.  And the Cheyenne language used  really is Cheynne.

[kv]

That's impressive... I've never actually learned a new language to write something... although I do usually do accents of characters in my games.

  -kv

[Zone]

Notice I don't try any complex sentences, just names and short direction  

[Curris]

I dabble in languages for fun. Although I usually don't commit to learning all of it.

Usually dead/obscure languages have more appeal to me.

I can read/write Runic alphabet (based on traditional Celtic druidic runes.)

Read/Write/ somewhat speak Gargish (created language based on an Arabic font script.)

Both of those I learned from the Ultima Series of videogames.

I also know some Spanish, Russian, Japanese, Esperanto, and Italian. Mostly common phrases, basic sentence structure. I need more vocabulary and memorization.

And like three words in Klingon. I can't pronounce them, but I recognize them when I here them, which is like never.

And all that knowledge makes it confusing to learn an actual language. . .  

[Zone]

New excerpt....


For my own amusement, for writing or general knowlege I have looked into Russian, Cheyenne, Italian, Hebrew, Spanish, and Cantonese among others, and I think I now can say shit in about 7 different languages...

[kv]

I tried to learn chinese, but I didn't have the time to put into it to really learn the nuances, so I got frustrated with it.

I've learned bits of spanish, russian, french, itallian, german, samoan, tongan, maori, and portugese. Mostly for my own entertainment, but at one point I spoke tongan, samoan, and spanish well enough to communicate in them. Not so anymore, but it was fun while it lasted.

I love the new excerpt- I wish my dates would go that well!
My fiance freaks out every time we get in a gunfight!

  -kv

[Nike Shox]

I would imagine chinese would be hard to learn, Is it?