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« Reply #45 on: April 20, 2007, 03:26:29 PM »
Interesting Social dynamics. . . Red and Spyder don't get along too well. It will be interesting to see if they grown together or come to blows. . .
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« Reply #46 on: April 23, 2007, 05:00:35 PM »
Ah, but he backs her in yet another situation with the team.  Dynamics are everything for the stressed out runner team...
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« Reply #47 on: July 19, 2007, 09:56:12 AM »
Sorry this has fallen off. I hope to get writing again once the at home computer is up and running. We're planning on trading in the old hardware and doing a big update soon, then Red and Ray will ride again.
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« Reply #48 on: August 04, 2007, 08:11:07 AM »
Trying to get going again - new post
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« Reply #49 on: August 05, 2007, 10:49:59 AM »
I like your description of his situational awareness- you manage to cover all the angles and make Red sound like a pro, rather than like you're quoting some TV show about military ops.

I also like the mom-n-pop food place description. I've eaten in many storefronts like that.

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« Reply #50 on: August 08, 2007, 08:56:10 AM »
Thanks :)  The grungy diner is based on a true rat trap...
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« Reply #51 on: January 16, 2008, 08:03:29 AM »
Sorry about the long hiatus.  There's a snappy newly edited post in the op slot if anyone is interested.
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« Reply #52 on: January 21, 2008, 04:36:32 PM »
The first post for this thread? All I see is the one with Red saving the troll strapped to a gurney.

I seem to remember reading that one before. Are the new excerpts in another thread? I remember that it doesn't pop up as a new post, because you edit the old post to remove the old one and put up the new one.

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« Reply #53 on: January 23, 2008, 08:39:40 AM »
Yeah that's it.  I just cut it down and tweaked it a bit to have it read snappier.  Its a fight scene and I didn't want it to drag.  Apologies for posting a repeat.  Writers are weird when it comes to editing :)
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« Reply #54 on: January 24, 2008, 12:47:38 PM »
Oh, okay, I thought I had just lost the thread.

Okay, the intro for Red sneaking around is different too, isn't it? I don't remember him getting garoutted before, but it has been a while since I read it.

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« Reply #55 on: January 25, 2008, 07:18:18 AM »
I just wanted him to be the super physad that he ought to be but not untouchable.  He takes his ouchies like a man and still wins in the end ;)  I'll now go post a new one in the OP slot...
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« Reply #56 on: April 02, 2008, 08:22:30 AM »
New scene in the OP slot if anyone ins interested.
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« Reply #57 on: April 02, 2008, 09:42:15 AM »
This is cool- I like how you get to see the interaction between characters- Red and his contact, Red and his co-runners. Very slight differences in the way he talks with each group, but very cool.

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« Reply #58 on: April 03, 2008, 08:52:34 AM »
Is that bad?  Doesn't everyone have their pro persona who is different from their at home persona.  I know at work I speak to strangers very differently than I deal with friends. 
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« Reply #59 on: April 03, 2008, 10:36:48 AM »
No, it's awesome- it's just something you don't see a lot of writers do. Usually heroes are pretty one-dimensional, and they're pursuing something so single-mindedly that they don't have room for anything else.

It was a clever bit of writing, and I just wanted to compliment you on it.

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